Sentence Construction

I’m having trouble constructing this sentence and whether it conveys what the character felt like and what the kiss felt like, with the soft cushions of her lips touching his…

“Kissing your lips goodbye last night was a dream that I did not want to end, even as you slipped away into the night”.

 

 

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